Thursday, November 19, 2009

My Real World Example

Originial form: All traffic must stop at 5pm when the retreat is played over the loud speakers and must remain stopped while it plays.

How I think it would be better: All traffic must stop, and remain stopped, at 5pm when the retreat plays over the loud speakers.

Crocker Science House

In both cases the authors may have been running low on time. A time cruch can create a situation in which less effort is put forward, less detail is considered, and less over-all attention is paid to the writing. The authors may have also thought they could convey their message without revising their efforts.

Thursday, November 5, 2009

Possesives

1.) homes of my sons'-in-law
2.) Arkansas' rivers. or rivers of Arkansas.
3.) Jim and Jone's home.
4.)research of the Ph.D.s
5.)McGraw-Hill's advertising
6.)The electrician's estimate.
7.)anyone else's idea.
8.) The witnesses' depositions.
9.)The airport's upper level.
10.)My friend's daughter.

1.) The tree surgeon could not save the white spruce's limb.
2.)The user's manual was so confusing that most consumers returned it to the company.
3.)The intuitive commands of Windows make it easier for users to move from one application to another.
4.) I will be in Hawaii on Mother's Day, in New Mexico on April Fools' Day, and in California on Veterans' Day
5.) Grover Cleveland was the choice of the people.
6.) Each participant filled out the reader's comment form.
7.)Now that he has his Bachelor's degree, he plans to get his mater's, and eventually his doctorate.
8.)The National Secretaries'conferance will be held in Houston this year.
9.)For the sake of appearance, the feuding vice presidents' kept their differences to themselves during the monthly staff meeting.
10.)My brother-in-law's idea was to have the family reunion at a spa.
11.)The President of the telophone company's idea was to offer discount rates to seniors.