Presentation

The topic for my Power Point Presentation is Spiritual Healing. I will discuss how spiritual healing has maintained it's place in the modern world.
I will begin my presenatation by highlighting basic spiritual healing facts; how it's defined in the medical sense, what type of healers exist, and etc. The basic facts will supply the audience with a basic knowledge of how my major defines spiritual healing and help to alleviate any misconceptions audience memebers may have. I will then move into explaing how it compares to modern scientific medicine. I have found three reliable sources from medical journals which discuss spiritual healing in an non-biased manner. I will rely on these sources for the bulk of my information. Using non-biased sources will help me avoid turning the presentation into an argument for or against spiritual healing. I don't have my introduction or conclusion figured out yet.

Good Ads

My first good ad comes from Covergirl.com. Any and all of the adds on the site are appealing. The text is appropriate for the material. The model (Drew Barrymore) is appealing to the public. Their lines are fun, such as "it's all eyes on you when you go full blast" and "lip magic" they seem to be appealing to both young and older!

The second add comes from Applebees.com. When you first enter the site it's like a present is being unwrapped, and once unwrapped the site appears and then the question "What's better than giving?" pops across the screen. Then in bigger lettering "More Giving" pops up. The main point of the ad is to sell gift cards for christmas. I like the use of the bigger lettering for "More Giving". It gives it more of an emphasis and drew me in. I also like the use of the unwrapping of a present as soon as you enter the site. Your eyes are automatically fixed on whatever is going on and the time of year it is now makes it very appropriate.

Bad Ads

http://industry.bnet.com/advertising/10004355/a-second-ralph-lauren-photoshop-mess-emerges/
The first bad Ad comes from the site listed above. The story attatched to the add explains it all too well! Apparently the Ralph Lauren company is having some trouble with their advertisements and the people who do the finsihing touches. No woman will ever look like the women in the two photoshopped ads the company has put out that has gained an ill reputation. It's unrealistic. A good advertisement would appeal to women rather than offend them.
Obviously the ad could have used the models actual body to improve it. A models body is already hard enough to obtain but it's feasible and socially accepted to the point that such an ad wouldn't be all over the news as a negative image.

http://www.photoshopdisasters.blogspot.com/
The second add is posted on this site. It's the tire ad for Axelrod Tire and Service.
This ad isn't offensive like the other ad but it's hard to take it serious b/c the photo of the tire still says stock photo on it. If they don't pay close attention to their advertisements then who knows what amount of attention they would pay to my tires or service!! Obviously the way to improve this ad would be to pay closer attention to the final copy!

Language/Victim

I know I have made a few blunders with language in my life. However, I can't remember those blunders in detail. So instead I will recall a slight blunder of language which offended me a bit recently. I work for Jenny Craig. I, myself, have a slender frame. Normally being told you don't need to diet is a compliment but just recently I had a client tell me I wouldn't know what needing to diet felt like. That client was making an assumption based on my current situation. We both kind of laughed off the remark but it still strikes me as a bit offensive. That client doesn't know my past well enough to assume such things.
The guy who played Cramer on Seinfield comes to mind when I think of celebrities who have made language blunders. His rant on a heckler is notorious as being one of the most slanderous rants recently. His use of racial slander was horrible and uncalled for.

My Real World Example

Originial form: All traffic must stop at 5pm when the retreat is played over the loud speakers and must remain stopped while it plays.

How I think it would be better: All traffic must stop, and remain stopped, at 5pm when the retreat plays over the loud speakers.

Crocker Science House

In both cases the authors may have been running low on time. A time cruch can create a situation in which less effort is put forward, less detail is considered, and less over-all attention is paid to the writing. The authors may have also thought they could convey their message without revising their efforts.

Possesives

1.) homes of my sons'-in-law
2.) Arkansas' rivers. or rivers of Arkansas.
3.) Jim and Jone's home.
4.)research of the Ph.D.s
5.)McGraw-Hill's advertising
6.)The electrician's estimate.
7.)anyone else's idea.
8.) The witnesses' depositions.
9.)The airport's upper level.
10.)My friend's daughter.

1.) The tree surgeon could not save the white spruce's limb.
2.)The user's manual was so confusing that most consumers returned it to the company.
3.)The intuitive commands of Windows make it easier for users to move from one application to another.
4.) I will be in Hawaii on Mother's Day, in New Mexico on April Fools' Day, and in California on Veterans' Day
5.) Grover Cleveland was the choice of the people.
6.) Each participant filled out the reader's comment form.
7.)Now that he has his Bachelor's degree, he plans to get his mater's, and eventually his doctorate.
8.)The National Secretaries'conferance will be held in Houston this year.
9.)For the sake of appearance, the feuding vice presidents' kept their differences to themselves during the monthly staff meeting.
10.)My brother-in-law's idea was to have the family reunion at a spa.
11.)The President of the telophone company's idea was to offer discount rates to seniors.

Parts 1,2,3,4, Integrating Sources

Part One:
Part one of Integrating Sources explores three basic principles that a writer should follow when integrating sources into a paper. The first principle states that a writer should not overuse paraphrasing or quoting because this takes away from the writers own actual thoughts. The second princple emphasizes that a writer needs to distinguish between they are speaking and when they are using the words from the source. The third princple aims to make sure that the writer clarifies why the source being integrated is of importance to their writing. Rules for quoting, how to quote big chunks, and using footnotes sparingly for discurve notes.

Part Two:
Part two explore citing sources that are used. This part goes over when to cite, when not to cite, and acknowledging sourcs that one isn't able tot cite. Some of the key points demonstrated for when to cite include: "whenever you mention in passing some aspect of one's work", "whenever you use factual information or data you found in a source", and "whenever you quote verbatem." there are other points established and most of them tie in with giving credit where credit is due. The when not to cite section is pretty self explantory with not citing common knowledge, every day, conversational items taking precident.

Part Three:
Part three attempts to teach the writer "how to avoid high risk situations" by avoiding plagiarism and the misuse of sources. Actions that are taken against a writer who does misuse or plagiarize are also highlighted in this part. A writer who does such an act may be failed from their course, have to go before a board, be expelled or so on.

Part Four:
This part highlights the different styles of documenting work. Utilizing footnotes/endnotes, special cases such as artwork or illustrations, how to do in text citation for the different fields( social sciences, humanities, etc) and how to cite from different formats such as electronic, magazines, books, etc are all included with examples.

Chapter 4 They Say I Say

Chapter 4 presents the reader with the "I say" stage of writing. The authors demonstrate the importance of transitioning to the "I agree"/"disagree" part of the paper. They urge writers to be blunt in their stance. There may be more than one way to say "I agree," "I disagree" or "I'm neutral" but the authors explain how bluntness is the best approach. When a writer directly states their stance it lets the reader know exactly where they stand. It takes the guess work out of being part of the audience.

Chapter 3 They Say I Say

The authors of They Say I say wrote Chapter three to demonstrate the correct usage of quotations in summaries. They explain that "quotations are orphans." This simply means that a writer, when quoting, takes a piece of work away from it's home or original place of existance and moves it. These "orphans" must be placed in a good home, where they fit. One can not just present a quote and than abondon it. Abondoning the quote after writing it is what the authors call a "hit and run quote". This takes away from the effectiveness of the quote. If the "orphans" aren't tied to an explanation it leaves the reader, who may not understand the quote, confused.
I agree with this point. Sometimes reading quotations within a paper is like reading poetry. Although the words may sound pretty, I don't always understand them. If poetry came with an explanation it would of course take away from the mystic tone, but a reader could more easily gauge the central point. An effective quotation must come with an explanation or be easily transistioned into the paper.

Chapter 2 They Say I Say summary

In Chapter two of "They Say, I Say" the authors urge writers to put their self in the shoes of whatever person they are summarazing. They insist that an overly biased introduction takes away from the effectiveness of a summary. Still, they admit that a writer should not totally abandon their own views. The task of knowing what idea one is writing for must always be kept in mind, even when trying to summarize the words of someone else. The authors also stress the importance of using signal verbs to introduce a summary. The authorsn use phrases such as "she demonstrates", "he admits", and "in fact" to demonstrate effective signal verb examples.

Chapter One They Say I Say Summary

In chapter one of They Say I Say the subject of summarizing what "They say" to effectivley portray what "I say" is discussed. It begins with an anecdote describing a conferance where the speaker was impassioned about the works of a Dr.X but just presented the thesis without explanation of why Dr.X's work was important. The authors move on to make their point that an effective essay summarizes what "They Say" near the begining. Templates are offered to the reader by the authors as a solution to this problem. These Templates explore many different avenues a writer can take such as using anecdotes, making what "They say" your own, starting with a quotation and so on.

Annie Dillard Discussion Questions

1.) If I am heavily involved in my writing then my position or level of comfort matters little. If I am stuck and can't thick of the right words then I start noticing the hardness of the chair or the strain of my sitting position. The more I try to get past the distraction of discomfort the less likely I am to produce anything. I like to bite my nails if I have writers block. If I like a particular topic I can just delve right in and start writing without any routine. If the topic is a sour one I try to gather my thoughts by pacing. It seems any type of movement helps me.
2.) I think the "bearing walls" which dillard refers to are generated by both the writer and social construction. This depends on what is being wrote though. In fiction writing I think the author has more of a creative license with these walls and is able to structure it to fit their goal. In essays/ papers for school I believe the walls are more socially constructed. The audience in this case usually has a format in mind and would like it to stick pretty closely. I don't so well with knocking out those bearing walls right now with my writing. I used to better but after years of being out of school I have only been writing for enjoyment without revision.
3.) I am the inchworm. My process of writing fumbles around lost and most of the time doesn't quite make it anywhere in the case of writing structured papers. I can also use bee's but in a different sense to explain my writing process. The swarming bee would describe my writing process when given an opportunity to write about a subject I like. I will attack it with ferocity but just once. Most of the time I haven't pushed myself to do the revision.
4.) I do share Dillards mystical view of writing. For me writing is an extension of my soul. My own personal journal is my greatest possesion. Although I don't have the right colors on my palette to paint a picasso I feel empowered every time I put pen to paper and let my hand express my heart.
5.) I think the vagueness goes back to the mystical view she holds. Something mystical is intriguing but not fully explained.

Practice Sentences: Commas, Semicolons, and Colons

1.) The flooding was worst at the point where New Jersey, New York, and Pennsulvania meet.
2.) Because he loved to read, to write, and to edit, Mr. Diamond was considering a career in library work, marketing, or publishing.
3.) Salinger's first novel, The Catcher in the Rye, captures the language and thoughts of teenagers.
4.) He has only one ambition; to produce a Broadway musical.
5.) If you blow out all your candles, your wish will come true.
6.) The district managers represents four regions: Terry Smith, Rochester NY; Chris Adler, Superior, WI; Kim Young, Chimayo, NM; and Pat Golden, Tallahassee, FL.
7.) The weather report predicted high winds, freezing rain, and show the highway patrol advised caution when driving; yet, the storm blew out to sea.
8.) My boss, who wears bright colors, is a cheerful person.
9.) He hires people who are energetic, efficient, and polite.
10.) When asked what she wanted to be later in life, she replied, "An Olympic swimmer."
11.) The governor issued this statement: "I have done nothing wrong; The IRS will find that my tax returns are all in order."
12.) Scientists spotted large numbers of dolphins; nurse and great white sharks; blue, gray and humpback whales; near the offshore staion.
13.) She lover her car, a red Toyota.
14.)If you drop by the doctor's office without an appointment you can be sure of one thing, an icy reception.
15.)His dog, a big labrodor retriever, is afraid of mice.
16.) His recent painting, which is hanging in our local restaurant, shows dogs in various disguises.
17.) His recent painting that is hanging in our local restaurant, shows dogs in various disguises.

"Real-World" Grammar Examples

I believe that the writers of the "real-world" grammar examples chose to write the sentences incorrectly because often times we try to reflect how we talk in the style of our writing. The overuse of commas may be to denote a certain pause that the writer felt when saying it but that doesn't translate in the world of grammar. However some writers may mess up on purpose in order to draw attention to the add. I'm sure it's been used before in advertising. Anything that grabs the attention of someone is a valid selling point. As long as it isn't a terrible mistake I'm sure that someone notcing the mistake will also notice whatever the add is promoting. I also believe that these errors were made because grammar is often misunderstood. I am no exception. Still I am shocked that the proof reading process didn't catch the errors. However it does speak volumes about our "real-world" use of grammar. I am sure that errors of such are less likely to appear in novels or published journals. The "real-world" use in advertising only goes to show how misunderstood grammar may be.

"Inventing the University"

Reading David Bartholomae's "Inventing the University" gave me a huge head ache. Suffering through it though I did find one intersting point. However the point did not come from Bartholomae himself but from another person whom he quotes, Linda Flower. This interesting point of which I speak of explains that an "expert writer" must be able to write for an audience. The "expert writer" must be able to change from their own discourse into the discourse of the audience. This brings to mind my major, Behavioral Science and Health. I would not write in the same manner for certain courses within this major. For instance I would not write a paper in a Philosophy course in the same manner and terminology that I would write a paper for a statistics course. Each course has it's unique set of language and expectations. In order to be a successful writer in either course I have to ask myself the very important question of "Who am I writing for?" and then be able to transform my writing accordingly.